User talk:DanyJG/Fandom culture in South Korea

I like how your article talks about the parasocial relationship between fans and idols. But I feel like when I read this, it's like I'm reading an essay instead of a wikipedia article. I would suggest looking doing some more in depth research about the different dynamics of this relationship. I don't know about the rest of the article but if saesangs weren't mentioned yet, I think it would be a good topic to cover. I also suggest to maybe look at other wikipedia articles that cover topics like this and examine the writing style of them, this could help it read as more of an article rather than an essay. Also, there are references needed for this part of the article because the audience should know where this information came from.

I did not really notice anything about this article that I can apply to my own, as I am working on a more biographical topic and less about just a culture.