User talk:Daotis07/sandbox

Tone
You've included very factual information as more of a list. This would be easier to read in a table format. ie. Type of Cider / Alcohol by Volume/ Process to make/ Description. Then you could reference the table once, instead of referencing every sentence separately. Bryantlib (talk) 03:23, 1 May 2018 (UTC)

Before making the paragraph 'live'
Remember to work with group members when uploading to the live page to ensure you dont upload the same information. Also consider how you will insert your information into the existing cider page. You may have to break up your sentences or not include everything depending on the information that is already on the page.

PROOFREAD your paragraph before you make your information 'live'.

Before you post make sure one person in your group created a new section on the Cider apple talk page you are uploading to, letting the people watching the page know you are making edits. And also make sure you summarize your final change, when submitting to the live page. If you don't remember how to do these steps, re-watch the tutorial. :)Bryantlib (talk) 15:36, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Adding information to Cider page
You are inserting information on the Cider page, which is semi-protected, to add your paragraphs to the live page, you will need to have made at least 10 edits. You can do this in several ways. editing in your sandbox or a group member's sandbox, or/and going through and doing the steps in the tutorial all add edits to your username. Basically you change something and hit 'publish changes' it counts as an edit. The little box called 'Notices' on the top right of all the Wikipedia pages tells you when you have made 10 edits. Bryantlib (talk) 15:36, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Content
Lots of details, but they seem to be mostly from one style guide. I suggest adding information from other sources, such as the USACM style guide, the Westons Cider Report that is available online, and Peter Mitchell's text that is available as a course reserve. It's important to highlight that there are different ways to discuss cider styles depending upon the intended use. For example, a style guide for a competition might contain different information than a style guide designed for consumers.