User talk:Darexo

Welcome
Hi Darexo. Welcome to Wikipedia!

I'm an online ambassador for your Global Youth Studies course. If you have any questions or need help with anything, feel free to leave me a message over on my talk page. You can also find help at the Teahouse, at the links on Questions, or on IRC. Gobōnobō + c 05:25, 30 August 2013 (UTC)

Hi Darexo! My name is Laura, and I am in the Global Youth Studies course as well. I hope you have a fabulous day & week!Lhegtvedt (talk) 15:17, 5 September 2013 (UTC)

Hello!
Hi, Darriana. Thanks for taking the time to virtually introduce yourself. I'm looking forward to seeing your contributions to Wikipedia!DrakeLibrarian (talk) 19:30, 10 September 2013 (UTC)

Ravi Patel - GYS
Hey Darexo,

Looking forward to doing more work with you in class.

Qwertyp23 (talk) 00:10, 11 September 2013 (UTC)

Great work - all you need is a complete reference!
Hi, Darexo! Your edit has stayed in the adolescence article! Good work! However, I believe you need to add the citation still. Could you please do that? I marked it with the notation to show where you need an actual reference, not just an in-text citation like you have now. Great start! Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 04:21, 11 September 2013 (UTC)
 * One more quick thing...I like the articles you identified for editing. My opinion on the proposal to write a new article on youth education is that it would be hard to make it unique from the other articles on education like Secondary education, High school, etc.  It would be hard for the article to be notable by Wikipedia's definition. Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 04:28, 11 September 2013 (UTC)

Feedback
Youth education is definitely a good topic. One way to help it feel more manageable might be to find a certain area of the globe or a certain country that you are interested in and that may not be covered very well in Wikipedia. I'm looking forward to seeing what you come up with! Good luck to you as well! Tapbh (talk) 20:24, 13 September 2013 (UTC)

Your area of interests seem interesting and I Can't wait to see which article you choose to use. What topic article are you leaning towards doing?Camotero2013 (talk) 20:59, 13 September 2013 (UTC)

Feedback
Your interest in Youth Education looks like it could be very interesting! I am interested to see what you find in relation to the affect employment has on the pursuit of secondary education. Since I plan on looking at Youth Employment we might cross some paths!

Kapplet (talk) 00:57, 14 September 2013 (UTC)

Feedback
Hey! Youth education is a very important topic and you should be able to find a lot of valuable information. Looking forward to reading more from you. Dcole12 (talk) 03:52, 14 September 2013 (UTC)
 * Dcole12, good job providing encouragement! What suggestions do you have regarding where to edit given Darexo's interests?  The youth education article may be too broad, as we discussed in class.  What ideas do you have?Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 19:02, 17 September 2013 (UTC)

Tips on providing feedback from Prof. V
Darexo, Thanks for providing positive encouragement to your fellow students! What suggestions would you have for Tapbh on how to pursue his topic? Where do you think he should begin? Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 19:02, 17 September 2013 (UTC)

Suggestions
Darexo,

I think you've got a really great direction you're planning on going in. The only downside is that this is a very broad topic. You might consider working on the 'school' section of the Youth page. Right now there's not a lot of information. As it happens, the only two sentences are about post-secondary education which is something you voiced interest in. There'd be a lot of opportunity to expand this page. Good luck!

AbbeyMaynard (talk) 18:47, 18 September 2013 (UTC)

Citations to consider
Hi Darexo - I am still looking for one more citation, but here are some that might help :)
 * [], "CULTURAL COLLISION IN URBAN SCHOOLS"
 * [] "Hip Hop Educational Literacy Program."
 * I also saw a journal that might be useful: []
 * Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 17:00, 24 September 2013 (UTC)

Topic Feedback
Darriana,

I can't contain my excitement I have for your topic! I think I might have a few resources you could use, too. It looks like you're going down the Education and Hip Hop path, but I have a book right now called Rap Music and Street Consciousness, Its on google.books, too. Its an ethnography so it takes a sociological view and examines a few cities in the United States and London, too (I believe). I'll post a link at the bottom if you're interested. The only thing I'd warn you about it putting this into a global context. Since this is going to be a new article, I'd personally say its awarded a bit more lenience as far as globalizing the article. It's just important to highlight somewhere along the way that hip hop is not exclusive to the United States. I'm excited to see how this turns out!

AbbeyMaynard (talk) 19:08, 2 October 2013 (UTC)

|Rap Music and Street Consciousness

Please archive your talk page.
Thanks! Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 01:36, 10 October 2013 (UTC)

Looking forward to the next step
Hi, Darexo. The next step is a draft of the article - rather than a proposal - in your sandbox. Please come see me or Abbey if we can assist you in any way. Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 21:04, 23 October 2013 (UTC)

Draft Feedback
A few suggestions before you move on to your next step.

I see a lot of opportunities for expansion here. You could talk about the history of hip hop, people like DJ Kool Herc, Grandmaster Flash, and Afrika Bambaataa in the lead in, giving hip hop more context for people who are less than aware of the place it comes out of. When you talk about hip hop role models, maybe do a contrast between east coast and west coast hip hop in the 90s in particular? Also, you could talk about the history of hip hop and education and how it isn't generally well received. You could bring in TuPac's youth education center or the Oakland Ebonics Controversy, too. There's also a wave of collegiate courses being taught on hip hop which could be neat to put in your article. The field of linguistics interacts with hip hop culture on a fascinating level-- it might be the root of some of the opposition to the movement. basically, there's a lot you could expand on. If you need any more sources, email me or something. I've been doing a lot of cultural critique of hip hop this semester and have some sources you could look at. Or at least some suggestions for what to look at.

AbbeyMaynard (talk) 21:40, 13 November 2013 (UTC)

Feedback on your draft
Hi Darexo.

Your draft is off to a good start. The references you have look solid, but you'll need a few more. I've edited your draft and put templates where references are needed.

Here are some additional sources that I think would be good to use:
 * - this is a great source to back up generic claims and it might have some specifics that are missing from your article
 * - focuses on the High School for the Recording Arts
 * - focuses on the High School for the Recording Arts
 * - focuses on the High School for the Recording Arts
 * - focuses on the High School for the Recording Arts
 * - focuses on the High School for the Recording Arts

Drop me a note on my talk page if you need help with anything. Gobōnobō + c 05:57, 23 November 2013 (UTC)