User talk:DarianRes/sandbox

Feedback on potential topics
These all look like good candidates for improvement. Studio Ponoc's article is especially thin, so if you could find more sources and flesh it out more, that would make a solid contribution. If you choose one of the other two topics, you'll be focusing more on rewriting and improving references, which is also fine, but seems less exciting to me personally. Ctextor at uofu (talk) 04:45, 11 February 2018 (UTC)

CT Feedback
Looks good so far--I think your group will substantially improve the article in terms of organization and content. One thing to watch for in the text of your draft so far is sentences that don't sound encyclopedic. For example, when you say that Tezuka "found the heart of the Japanese people," that's difficult to establish as fact. Also, when you say neo visual kei went off in a different direction, it leaves your reader wondering how that direction is different from what came before. Ctextor at uofu (talk) 14:53, 10 April 2018 (UTC)

Your sources look pretty solid and you've got some great work going on. I like that you have chosen some very interesting Japanese Pop Culture topics, particularly Japan's soft power (Cool Japan). If I could make a suggestion, your contribution on Visual Kei would benefit from having a source after the beginning paragraph. I feel that without a source to back the claim about female bands, the article takes on a different voice. Other than that, your article is steadily growing! Keep it up! (^_^)

FuuHouji (talk) 19:35, 10 April 2018 (UTC)FuuHouji (Sayward)