User talk:Darkest Zakk/Mohamed al-Hamdani

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i understand how hard it can be to find information on these journalists and that the lack of personal information was a big part of all of our pages, one thing i did notice is that you didnt individually cite the sources in the sources sections, and that you never mentioned what his killers motives were, while you make a point to specifically call out that the motives were confirmed by multiple sources. Again i realize how hard it is to fin info on these guys so im not going to comment on a lack of content because my page isnt realy any longer, however i would have liked a little more information on the context. I for one am not familiar with this specific event, as im sure many other who view this page wont be either, so maybe a little more background into the story he was covering when the tragedy occured could be good for the article. like i said i enjoyed what you have here and encourage you to further investigate the incident to delve deeper into the event that led to his death. AmStudent (talk) 04:09, 6 October 2011 (UTC) Andrew Fox AmStudent (talk) 04:09, 6 October 2011 (UTC)

Try and find some more information about it, there has to be more. At least on some background or something, the article is so short, and there are no sources to back up your information. It's hard to really give you any feedback where there is hardly anything there. Just try and build up on what you have right now, and go from there! It's all good Inpayne (talk) 13:20, 7 October 2011 (UTC)

You're not using inline citation for even the sources you have. That's critical. You need to have references pointing to specific facts o back them up!

Notability is also important: CREATE THE CONNECTION BETWEEN YOUR JOURNALIST'S DEATH WHILE REPORTING TO Iraq War insurgent attacks AND THE LIST OF Suicide bombings in Iraq since 2003. I BELIEVE YOU HAVE BEEN SEARCH TOO NARROWLY ON YOUR PERSON AND NOT BROADER ABOUT THE PHENOMENON OF SUICIDE BOMBING.Crtew (talk) 16:19, 28 October 2011 (UTC)