User talk:Darrendi/sandbox

The article is interesting so far, but I feel like you jump right into things and don't explain them enough. Slow your thought process down and give details so that the readers better understand what you're talking about. --Erikawicher98 (talk) 20:44, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

create an outline for this entry. if it;s about tommy john surgery mention it earlier. you should find academic article about the surgery and kids going through it. i searched academic search complete and found a few articles using tommy john surgery and minor. cite properly at the end. you need author, article title, journal name, volume page numbers. you have a citation to ub's proxy server. Ctysick (talk) 15:58, 29 November 2016 (UTC)