User talk:Davitg13/Ethnic groups in Burundi/Laleeibssa Peer Review

General info Whose work are you reviewing? Davitg13 Link to draft you're reviewing: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Davitg13/Ethnic_groups_in_Burundi Lead I think your first sentence is a good introductory sentence. I would maybe add a statistic in there about which ethnic group makes up the most of the population. I do think you did a nice job of setting yourself up by highighting ethnic tensions.

Content I think your content is very neutral since you do talk about essentialist arguments as well as constructivist arguments when it comes to ethnic divisions. I think you can maybe add more cultural things about the ethnic groups to give readers a holistic view on the topic.

Tone and Balance Guiding questions: I would work on the ethnic tensions and violence section. It's pretty neutral; however, I think you can represent more sides by talking about ways they the ethic groups tried o make peace with each other.

Sources and References You have a lot of sources which is great, I would just spend some time sourcing your paper because there are some sentences that need in-text citations. Also, there are a lot of sources from 1999, so I would try and see if you could have something more recent. You're doing a great job by finding scholars sources though.

Organization I think you should switch the order a little bit. I think you should talk about the different eras before you get into the different arguments because it breaks the historical flow of your paper. Additionally, I think that ethnic tensions and violence should go after the democracy section. However, I did not catch any spelling or grammatical errors. Laleeibssa (talk) 17:28, 7 April 2020 (UTC)