User talk:Dawnnaomii/sandbox

For Andrew: I think the concept of resistance in psychoanalysis is different than in psychology. However, the psychology article turns out to be mostly about resistance in psychoanalysis. Ill need to think about this a bit. I think you could focus on the historical development of the concept of resistance in psychoanalysis. I will email Ian at Wiki Ed to see what he thinks. J.R. Council (talk) 22:47, 2 March 2016 (UTC) For Marie: You did not leave me any questions. For Alissa: You didn't leave questions or list 2 references. For Candace: You left a question about adding/combining articles (see below), but did not leave comments on problems or references. For all of you: A general question was how to deal with the existing article on Psychological resistance. I contacted Ian at Wiki Ed about this, and here is his response:
 * Since the resistance (psychoanalysis) exists, and has for a decade, your students should feel free to expand it without worry. The problem really lies with the other article. Your students are free to ignore it, but they could also clean up that article.
 * I suppose the key question is how the two topics are related. If they're entirely different concepts, then I'd say trim the info out of the "psychological resistance" article and add a link to "resistance (psychoanalysis)" either as a "see also" at the bottom or a "not to be confused with" at the top. If they're somewhat related and a section about the latter topic belongs in the former, just not as lengthy a discussion as it is at present, I'd suggest that they clean it up a bit, and add a see main link at the top of the section.

I think Ian's advice is very good, including the suggestion to clean up the psychological resistance article. J.R. Council (talk) 23:36, 3 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Short answer: don't worry. Longer answer: don't worry too much, but it would be nice if the psychological resistance article was also cleaned up a bit.

Dr. Council's comments on Assignment 5
First, some general comments and responses to your questions. Those grayed-out boxes happen when you have a blank space at the beginning of a line. I've fixed the first instance. A colon, i.e., :, in the first space makes an indent. Please work on properly formatting your article for Wikipedia. You will need to do this eventually, and might as well start now. Comments on specific sections: I. Main topic
 * I actually did want you all to be working on the three sections together, rather than each doing the three sections separately. As long as you sign, I can tell what you've done. You'll need to consolidate them.
 * 1) To-do list: Looks good. Just consolidate into a master list.
 * 2) Outline: Same thing - consolidate. I think you're covering the basics here, but you can still differentiate your outline. Adding details will make writing your lead section easier. See the handout on Editing Wikipedia articles on Psychology for how to organize an article about a psychological concept.
 * Also, do a proper outline, like this:
 * A. Subtopic
 * 1. Sub-sub topic,etc.


 * 1) References: Some reference citations are not formatted properly for Wikipedia. (Others are.) As you add text later, be sure to use the drop-down menu to attach reference citations in appropriate places and format references properly.
 * 2) Task commitments: These are scattered around. It would be good to consolidate these as well.
 * Actually, I could only find a commitment from Candace. J.R. Council (talk) 21:35, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

J.R. Council (talk) 19:04, 23 March 2016 (UTC)

Lead Section Critiques
For Alissa: It is a good lead, however from my understanding resistance is not just obstruction of memories from consciousness as that would just be the repression aspect of resistance, but rather it is pretty much anything where the patient is getting in the way of therapy, even as simple as refusing to talk about something even if it is in their conscious mind. Dawnnaomii (talk) 00:16, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

For Marie: It is very good that you included stuff about the id/ego as that is very important in the history and will help tie that together. But I also think that you should make it clear that it can be done directly or indirectly as that is important too. Dawnnaomii (talk) 00:16, 30 March 2016 (UTC) For KandaceI like the way your article fowls and has a lot of detain without being too wordy. What if we combined elements of both of our leads to make the final? Marie Fre (talk) Marie Fre (talk) 18:01, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

Dr. Council's comments on Assignment 6
Nice work, everyone. Taken as a whole, the lead sections cover the topic well, and the critiques are very constructive. Taking the critiques into account, put the information in your leads into one consistent paragraph and you'll have a very good piece of work. One comment of my own is that most of you seem a bit unclear about the role of the unconscious in resistance. As I understand it, resistance consists of oppositional behavior displayed by the patient towards the therapist. According to Freud, the motivations underlying resistance are unconscious, until they are interpreted by the therapist and accepted by the patient. J.R. Council (talk) 16:39, 6 April 2016 (UTC)
 * BTW, I don't see where Candice and Marie have commented on all of the lead sections, although Andrew and Alissa have. J.R. Council (talk) 16:40, 6 April 2016 (UTC)

Dr. Council's comments on Assignment 7
Nice job Group 6! You are good to go for developing the rest of the article. You still need to work on the lead, though. My comments:
 * 1) It is still a bit long. Some of the material could be moved to the main article.
 * 2) Be sure to add in reference citations and internal links. J.R. Council (talk) 01:56, 13 April 2016 (UTC)

Dr. Council's comments on Assignment 8
Great work, Group 6! With a little more work, you'll be ready to publish! Here are some specific suggestions for improving each section:
 * Lead: I edited the first sentence slightly to make it more clear that resistance is oppositional behavior.
 * History: Nice job here. No changes needed.
 * Variations: Maybe a better title for this section would be "Types of resistance" or "Forms of resistance." In addition to providing links to main articles on repression and transference, you should include a brief definition. Definition of Ego-resistance has a wrong word. Use 'minor' rather than 'menial.' "Working-through" doesn't need to be in quotes. None of the other terms are.
 * Applications: The first sentence refers to psychoanalysis as: "a type of mindfulness therapeutic program." Mindfulness is not the correct term here. The term, mindfulness, has connotations of meditation and mindfulness-based psychotherapy. A better term would be "insight-oriented."
 * Criticisms: The first sentence, "Over time, psychologists have contended with significant division in regards to the concept of resistance." is clumsy. Better: "Psychologists remain divided with regard to the concept of resistance."
 * References: I'm very impressed with the reference list. You've done a great job of researching this concept.
 * There is some discussion of where to list contributions right before the references. I do need to know who did what in order to give proper credit. J.R. Council (talk) 18:49, 21 April 2016 (UTC)

''Super! I have sent Ian email asking him to look over your article.'' J.R. Council (talk) 18:51, 26 April 2016 (UTC)

Feedback
This looks good to me. I changed "the term resistance" to just "resistance" because articles are able concepts, not terms. It seems trivial, but there are times when that distinction is important (it can save a lot arguments about semantics). The other thing is a bit more important - every statement in a Wikipedia article should not only be supported by a cited source, it should also be possible for the reader to connect the statement with the supporting citation. In a few places you include statements after the final citation (most notably in the Applications section); for the reader, it isn't clear where this information is coming from. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:36, 28 April 2016 (UTC)
 * I see you've moved this over, or at least started the process. Please let me know when you're all done. J.R. Council (talk) 20:45, 3 May 2016 (UTC)