User talk:Dayanamosa

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Reversion of my edits
Would you please explain why you reverted my edits to MERCI Retriever. Permit me to explain why I made the edits so that you can explain why your version should be retained: If you can explain why your version of the article is better than the revision I had created, I'll be willing to consider that. But please remember that you do not own the article. Once you have published it on Wikipedia, it will be subject to constant improvement by other authors. WikiDan61 ChatMe!ReadMe!! 21:06, 17 September 2012 (UTC)
 * 1) General grammar.  Your article contained several examples of poor grammar and excessive wordiness.
 * Example:
 * If a person suffers from an ischemic stroke, there is an obstruction within their blood vessels that are supplying blood to the brain.
 * replaced by
 * In an ischemic stroke, there is an obstruction within the blood vessels that supply blood to the brain.
 * 1) Excessive detail.  We don't need a full description of the FDA approval process -- that is the topic of a different article.  All we need to know here is the evidence that this device has undergone the FDA approval process.
 * 2) Oddly chosen diagrams.  We don't need an animate GIF file to explain what a helicoid is.  If users care to investigate that term, they can follow the Wikilink.
 * 3) Confusing details.  The "Mechanism" description was confusing and poorly worded.  It was not clear from your description whether the clot was being pulled out or pushed out, and whether one or two catheters is involved.  I admit that my clarification of this section may well have introduced factual errors, but that was based on the confusion inherent in your original description.


 * Please be more careful about not copying and pasting sentences out of your sources. I found two sentences straight out of the abstract, which I've marked as a direct quotation.  It might be best if you re-wrote them in your own words.


 * [[Image:Rod of asclepius.png|20px|left]]If you are interested in medicine-related themes, you may want to check out the Medicine Portal. If you are interested in improving medicine-related articles, you may want to join WikiProject Medicine (sign up here or say hello here).


 * If you have questions, please feel free to say hello at WT:MED, which is one of the pages where some people who are interested in medicine-related articles hang out. WhatamIdoing (talk) 20:26, 18 September 2012 (UTC)