User talk:Dedoton4/sandbox

Peer Edit/Review: I think your "Controversy" section is well thought out, and gives the reader a comprehensive overview of the law suit. As an individual who did not fully grasp the situation, I think this section was very helpful. Before you delve into the controversy, however, I think you should add more into the "History" section of the article. I feel that you use the single long quote to explain the entire history of Joe Camel. Do some more searching about the development of the caricature. Analyze the quote a little more, while remaining objective, of course. Its well done though! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Yalie123 (talk • contribs) 01:13, 14 November 2017 (UTC)

Hey Dedoton4, how'd you get that name? I need some inspiration.

Hello Dedoton!

OK so far but it looks like you got quite a bit more to do before the first draftRJBazell (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 21:28, 6 November 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review: Hey Dedoton! I think you're first draft is looking really good! You provide lots of helpful and insightful information on the topic. The biggest suggestion I have is that I think you're lacking an adequate amount of citations in certain parts of your article, including a variation of sources. Other than that, however, good job! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Arayofsunshine12 (talk • contribs) 04:45, 14 November 2017 (UTC)