User talk:Deena.husami/sandbox

Finance and Business Repeated use of “began” in first sentence

Paragaph doesn’t flow, ‘multiple factors’ and then ‘one factor’ doesn’t sound as eloquent as it could

Latin America

Opening sentence sounds awkward. Rephrase

Second sentence, change to “In Chile, the most watched show in 2014 was…” or something

Viewers from argentina -> argentine viewers

Another use of ‘multiple factors’

Couellette215 (talk) 14:02, 28 November 2018 (UTC)couellette215

Finance and Business:

Awk phrasing of "One factor that is that in order to..."

Latin America

"states" instead of "says" — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rcadieux22 (talk • contribs) 14:06, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

Arab world

For the last paragraph, make sure each sentence has a citation after it. Wikipedia may see it and not know that you are citing the whole paragraph. Do it just incase. Same for the second paragraph you added to, but there aren’t any citations in this one. ''' Finance and Business ''' Make sure each sentence has a citation after it.

'''Latin America ''' Citations for the sentence about ‘Exathlon’ — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bshoukeir24 (talk • contribs) 14:15, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

- The format of the articles are a little unprofessional. - The beginning sounds a little weird, try and work on word choice and grammar.

"Some Turkish series are more appealing to women, while some action series attract male audiences, which helps attract different types of advertisers for different viewerships." Without a citation, seems like a general claim. Has less relevance to the topic than the other information in this section.

"The most successful series in Turkey is Aşk-ı Memnu, which has broken rating records there" If possible to find which records, add. If not, consider rewording without broken records there. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Lordakowski (talk • contribs) 14:19, 28 November 2018 (UTC)