User talk:Degetsering/sandbox

Hi Degetsering, While reviewing your article I noticed grammatical errors. I would just suggest rereading the article and fixing spelling as well as grammar. There are certain sentence flow errors. Fixing those should improve your article significantly. In your lead section there was a citation at the beginning of the first sentence. I don't know if this was intentional or not. Also in the lead section you state "Jews", would it be possible to actually type out the word Jewish, as I know some people might be offended by just Jews. In the Private and non-profit section i think more cold be added, if you couldn't find anything else, id just eliminate that section completely. All in all, your article had a great flow, very detailed. Structure was great, and your sources seemed reliable. Gdcespedes (talk) 16:45, 11 April 2016 (UTC)