User talk:Deirdregallo/sandbox

Prof. D. Feedback: Hi Deirdre -- Great work here. I do agree with Jane on all points (thanks !). I do think linking to other intersex pages on wikipedia will help, and also maybe spending a little time with the Spurgas reading to elaborate the case against "disorder"? I think also maybe elaborating on gender nonconforming, genderqueer, nonbinary; and accounting for the sex vs gender differentiation. i.e., "physical/cis" sex vs identity/gender... It's kind of a lot to take on, but would importantly bring these pieces out of invisibility in this article (which is as we know a form of passive oppression) so just take what you can and leave a note in "talk" about what you think needs to also be addressed that you're not able to get to. I wonder if it makes sense to have an "intersex" subsection and a "genderqueer" subsection? Thoughts? Good work so far with citations and hyperlinks, and citations. With the one citation that says "check date values in"... I think the issue is probably based on how you generated the citations -- that is to say, wiki is very user friendly but if you give it too much info it can get confused. Try re-doing it by simply plugging in the DOI and see if that helps. Let me know if you have questions! --T. Danylevich (talk) 04:31, 18 April 2020 (UTC)

Hi, Deirdre- This article reads very clearly. You probably have read the wiki article https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Intersex_medical_interventions which I thought did a pretty thorough treatment of some aspects of the subject and would be worth referencing in your section.

I think wherever we use the word "disorder" it would be good to see if we can substitute a more neutral term like "condition" although of course the DSM describes the condition as a disorder! Thus the initials DSD so in cases like that there's no avoiding the loaded word.

Overall your sources look excellent. I found it challenging to not get lost in the endless reading about our group's subject. I think you did a great job finding solid references.

For the two instances when you use a quote from a source, I think the wiki standard is to cite the source in the body of the article rather than just the numbered citation. So you'd want to name the source before quoting them, I believe. Such as, In an article on LGBTQIA populations and addiction, authors J. Sherer and P. Levounis note the importance of taking a sexual history and maintaining a tone of openness and acceptance in order to establish a good relationship with intersex patients. (and then insert the quote)

Also a small note, here it says "axis of disparity" but the wiki article uses the word "difference"--maybe that changed recently?

Jane4dc (talk) 19:48, 12 April 2020 (UTC)Jane4dc