User talk:Delenamobley

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Hello, Delenamobley, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Draft notes
Hi, I have some notes about your draft:


 * I fixed the formatting since the small text wouldn't really be something that should be in the main article.


 * Make sure that you are only summarizing the source material and not creating your own original research. I'm a little concerned that this reads like an essay based on the sourcing as opposed to a summary of the material. For example, some of the sources look to be book reviews so I'm not sure that they can be used to back up as much information as it is in your draft.
 * You should also avoid making any declarative sentences such as "Through messaging in television programming, viewers learn to believe". Basically, this is saying that the claim in the sentence is absolutely true or at least something that is so universally held to be true that it is as good as absolutely true. It's rare that something is so widely seen as accurate that it can be stated in this fashion, so you should instead attribute the claims to the person making them such as "According to This Person, messaging in television program causes viewers to believe that...". This way it shows that it's the claim of a specific person.


 * Going back to the sources, I'm not sure that the reviews are really super great sources for this, mostly because reviews can sometimes be limited in the amount of text they can place in their review. While there are journal reviews out there that take up many pages, there are also ones that are only 3-4 paragraphs long. As such, what you can pull from it is relatively limited. If what you're pulling from is the book in the review, it's better to cite the book.


 * Be cautious when it comes to mentioning study findings. For one, you want to make sure that you have a secondary source that covers the study. For the other, it's that studies are fairly limited in scope so you need to make sure that the study findings show proper wide context. For example, the study findings you go into depth about are both about American shows, so this doesn't really show how the findings apply on a global scale. You want to be careful about giving it too much weight in the article for the same reason, as you need to be able to show how the study findings fit into a wider context. Because studies are so limited, findings are really only applicable for the specific people studied - people in California may respond differently than people in Florida or China. Even within the group differences in things like culture, education, and income can make huge differences as well.
 * Here's how I'd potentially re-do the section:
 * Research has been conducted to determine how television informs self-identity while reinforcing stereotypes about culture. Some communication researchers have argued that television viewers have become reliant on prime-time reality shows and sitcoms to understand difference as well as the relationship between television and culture. According to a (year) study on matriarchal figures on the shows The Sopranos and Six Feet Under, researchers stated that the characters of Carmela Soprano and Ruth Fisher were written as stereotypical non-feminists who rely upon their husbands to provide an upscale lifestyle. They posited that these portrayals served as evidence that the media influences stereotype ideologies about class and stressed the importance of obtaining oral histories from "actual mothers, caretakers, and domestic laborers" who have never been accurately portrayed.
 * Pop culture researchers have studied the social impacts of popular television shows, arguing that televised competition shows such as The Apprentice sends out messages about identity that may cause viewers to feel inadequate. According to (person or persons) television media perpetuates narrow stereotypes about social classes while also teaching viewers to see themselves as inferior and insufficient due to personal aspects such as "race or ethnicity, gender or gender identity, social class, disability or body type, sexuality, age, faith or lack thereof, nationality, values, education, or another other aspect of our identities."
 * This tightens it up a little bit while making it more general. I would definitely try to find more sourcing to make sure that it has as much of a global perspective as possible, though.

I hope that this all helps! I think you chose a really awesome topic to research! A lot of the above notes are really about adapting to Wikipedia's writing style, which can take a while to get used to, so don't let the long notes get you down. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:49, 27 June 2019 (UTC)

DYK nomination
Hi, I saw that you created a nomination at Template:Did you know nominations/Social Aspects of Television impact the public's understanding about Difference, and Identity?, however in order to create a nomination you would need to have either created a new page or have expanded an existing article to five times its original length. As such, the current nomination isn't really valid. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:27, 8 July 2019 (UTC)

Incomplete DYK nomination
Hello! Your submission of Template:Did you know nominations/Social Aspects of Television impact the public's understanding about Difference, and Identity? at the Did You Know nominations page is not complete; if you would like to continue, please link the nomination to the nominations page as described in step 3 of the nomination procedure. If you do not want to continue with the nomination, tag the nomination page with db-g7, or ask a DYK admin. Thank you. DYKHousekeepingBot (talk) 05:05, 9 July 2019 (UTC)