User talk:Demzong

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ALR (talk) 18:08, 13 August 2009 (UTC)

Bryant article
Notwithstanding the style of writing that you're using most of the additions that you're putting into the Bryant article need supporting evidence. The style issue is less of an issue as someone else will turn it into an encyclopaedic style, but without evidence the insertions are liable to challenge and can be removed in accordance with Wikipedia policies.

I would suggest reading WP:V and WP:NOR on the topic. Any questions feel free to leave a note on my talk page, or respond here.

ALR (talk) 18:08, 13 August 2009 (UTC)

Dear Mr Feeny, many thanks for taking the time to respond. You have my deepest sympathies for your loss, those of 15POG do a much misunderstood job and your daughter was clearly very effective to have been tasked as she was.

I have already made some moves to modifying the style to fit with wikipedias expectation, but a couple of points would benefit from support in a form acceptable to the policies. In particular the citation that you refer to from US command in Baghdad, and the establishment of the award of a medal at Chix. The other point is her posting to Whitehall, that wasn't mentioned in any of the MoD media information, that's probably the most difficult to support as I would assume that she would have been in DIS so nothing in the public domain will demonstrate that.

I would consider a reference to the citation itself as acceptable evidence of the former, although I am aware that some would disagree and challenge its inclusion on that basis, the latter could be evidenced by perhaps a local news report identifying it. I assume that you instituted the award by providing the medal, my own parents did similar with respect to my brother, so anything in the public domain or in the Int Corps Association magazine for example.

I hope that clarifies how to assure that the information that you have provided remains in place.

ALR (talk) 21:35, 18 August 2009 (UTC)

Re Cpl S. Bryant(Née Feely) I hope this response also reaches you. The newspaper link attached below is one of a multitude about Sarah (as you can imagine) but this one in particular mentions ALL the points you feel need qualifying and also has a picture image of the medal. I wiil check again in a few days to see if the link was satisfactory for the areas of concern. Best regards. --Demzong (talk) 08:56, 26 August 2009 (UTC)

http://www.newsandstar.co.uk/news/medal_created_in_memory_of_carlisle_soldier_sarah_bryant_1_569059?referrerPath=home/news_star_search_results_page_2_1962

Mr Feeny

Thankyou, that link is useful. I'll sort out the citations on the reference when I get a chance, although pretty busy at the moment.

For what it's worth I have very little to do with templer Wing at Chix so hadn't heard about the medal.

Best regards

ALR (talk) 10:05, 26 August 2009 (UTC)