User talk:Denessav/sandbox

peer review
what can be improved on there is some odd word choice like with the use of win rather than the word victory a fair number of your sentences are lacking citations

What you did well you writing overall reads very well except for the above suggestions to change "win" to "victory". despite lacking the in-text citations the sources you listed are good. formatting is good and consistent with the writings and the site format The Grammer and punctuation is rather good you kept a neutral tone throughout the whole piece suggestions consider changing the word win to victory to improve word flow your sources are good but consider looking to finding more