User talk:Dennisbt/sandbox

The Lead: Your lead is well written but I would try to add more internal links and references. Organizations: clarify who "them" is in the first sentence of first body paragraph. Take out the word "around" in the second sentence under the subsection "The War". Clarify who they are in the sentence, "they offered peace to the American People". The last sentence of the "The War" section made is a bit confusing. "The Aftermath" seems to contain run on sentences maybe try to break it up a little. Balance: Paragraph length is well balanced but I would try to have more internal links in your lead and body sections. Try linking locations, people, and treaties. References: Add more citations. Your writing seems to be unverified right now because you do not have many citations through out your work.Abigayle UC Account (talk) 16:43, 26 October 2018 (UTC)