User talk:Desarayjackson/sandbox

Khulan G (talk) 15:46, 18 November 2020 (UTC)
 * You did great job to organize your article and already put contents that should be appeared.
 * I think, you repeated the word such as infection or inflammation in same paragraph which makes your article neglected.
 * The cause section would be great if you may add some source of causes such as which bacteria or virus or organisms are most infectious.
 * Some histology pictures or images are needed to recognize the disease.

Peer review Belagha (talk) 18:42, 18 November 2020 (UTC)
-Desaray, I think you did a great job adding all of the important subheadings that people would want to learn about this topic. -Something I think you can work on is that you were kind of repetitive with a lot of words like "infection/infectious" -Under the cause for the disease, maybe you can find out which bacteria it is that causes the infection -I think you can rephrase a lot of sentences to make it sound more professional and sophisticated Belagha (talk) 18:42, 18 November 2020 (UTC)

Dr. Weiner's Comments
--76.255.203.210 (talk) 03:29, 21 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Avoid filler sentences like the first sentence in signs and symptoms
 * A picture of the anatomy involved would really help.
 * If the acute vs chronic falls under diagnosis, connect it to that. If that's not the right place, figure out where is and explain the difference.
 * If all your treatment info came from the same source, cite at the end. If not, add additional citations.
 * You discussed prevention information in recent research. I'd like to see that in your prevention and treatment section.
 * You've done a good job here with something that I know has limited information. I know how hard you have worked finding what little information is out there. You've really pulled together the pieces that there are. I think this could be really helpful.

- It is not possible to not use infection and infectious when talking about a disorder that causes an infection. Also there is not much information on this topic to provide all more variety of terms.--Desarayjackson (talk) 02:17, 17 December 2020 (UTC)