User talk:Desireeaustin/sandbox

Martii70 (talk) 02:10, 12 November 2020 (UTC)
 * I like the content and the lay out of your wiki page. The introduction is captivating and you use the links for words that are uncertain to the reader.
 * The sections are brief and a lot of bullet points. Looks like the plan for a final project, oooh. But your bullet points can lead to some good content.
 * Not enough sources, only 5.
 * If possible, add some color to the page by adding images.

Jenlorenzana (talk) 19:45, 16 November 2020 (UTC)
 * I think the way you laid out your Wiki was super easy to read and I really liked what you included for the research direction.
 * In the Prevention/Treatment section, I feel that the every day reader might be confused as to the medication classes, so finding a way to condense/explain that could be helpful!
 * Adding some Wiki Images could help add some character to the page and explain a major part of the disease (glomeruli) in relation to where they are found in the kidneys.
 * I love your epidemiology facts, they are super interesting! Potentially adding sub-headings or bullets to this might make the data easier to comprehend.

Hmartin55 (talk) 18:31, 18 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Your layout was very clear and easy to follow-- this was a huge bonus because it looked very aesthetically pleasing and inviting for the reader.
 * I think you could have a few more sources. A variety is good and then you additionally might find some inconsistencies in the information that you have previously come across.
 * Additionally, I think it would be good to add some images so the reader doesn't have to look at a page of just words!! :)
 * The bullet points are good because it provides quick, easy information. However, I think it might be too simple for this project.

--Sweiner02 (talk) 01:58, 22 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Symptoms needs citations
 * Some grammar issues. Check over your wording.* Link any term that is important or uncommon to its own wikipedia article the first time it shows up.
 * Research directions needs citations.
 * Doing a quick google scholar search finds several recent articles. Make sure to address those
 * Well structured and with lots of good information!
 * Consider including a picture to demonstrate relevant anatomy