User talk:Destructo66/Atum/SweetJonesN Peer Review

Hi Destructo66-

The lead section is understandable, but I think there could be more to place in this section. Maybe summarize the fact that he is the father of Shu and Tefnut. The structure is clear although I think that under the Relationships to other Gods, the statement "Tears of joy he shed upon their return were the first human beings" could be moved to another section since this has nothing to do with a relationship with another God. The coverage is neutral, having many sources to back the statements up. I think there is plenty of room to find more sources, even if it's to back already accounted for information.

I hope this helps even just a little!