User talk:Dfbrandley/sandbox

Tone
Tone is good. Saccharomyces cerevisiae can be linked to its Wikipedia page. Search "Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Linking" if you don't remember how to link wikipedia pages. Volatility is not mentioned on the Cider page at another point, so you might want to describe what it is.The last sentence seems unrelated, but could maybe fit in well after an existing sentence or paragraph. Bryantlib (talk) 05:41, 1 May 2018 (UTC)

Content
Comments from Kathy: Your statement about yeast not affecting odors cites an article that looked at phenolics, not odor compounds. I’d like to see little more detail/info for many of these statements. Otherwise it is too general. Ex: When I read this, “Spontaneous fermentation commenced by indigenous yeasts and finished by Saccharomyces cerevisiae has been shown to produce ciders with different concentrations of volatile and non-volatile compounds, perhaps dependent on production technique “, I want to know what compounds increase, what compounds decrease, how did production methods affect concentrations? You cannot completely cover the paper’s findings, but maybe a little more info. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Oenotropae (talk • contribs) 22:50, 2 May 2018 (UTC)

Before making the paragraph 'live'
Remember to work with group members when uploading to the live page to ensure you dont upload the same information. Also consider how you will insert your information into the existing cider page. You may have to break up your sentences or not include everything depending on the information that is already on the page.

PROOFREAD your paragraph before you make your information 'live'.

Before you post make sure one person in your group created a new section on the Cider apple talk page you are uploading to, letting the people watching the page know you are making edits. And also make sure you summarize your final change, when submitting to the live page. If you don't remember how to do these steps, re-watch the tutorial. :)Bryantlib (talk) 15:58, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Adding information to Cider page
You are inserting information on the Cider page, which is semi-protected. To add your paragraphs to the live page, you will need to have made at least 10 edits. You can do this in several ways; editing in your sandbox or a group member's sandbox, or/and going through and doing the steps in the tutorial all add edits to your username. If you change something and hit 'publish changes' it counts as an edit. The little box called 'Notices' on the top right of all the Wikipedia pages tells you when you have made 10 edits. Bryantlib (talk) 15:58, 7 May 2018 (UTC)