User talk:Dfleur/sandbox

Fixed a selling error in Bugo Dfleur (talk) 07:11, 6 February 2015 (UTC)
 * That's good, but you need to fix at least two things. See if anything in the same article needs to be copyedited. If not, find another article. Josef Horáček (talk) 21:00, 7 February 2015 (UTC)

In need of more citations Electroencephalography — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dfleur (talk • contribs) 06:47, 9 February 2015 (UTC)

1) History on Adolf Beck: Beck started experiments on the electrical brain activity of animals. Beck placed electrodes directly on the surface of brain to test for sensory stimulation. His observation of fluctuating brain activity lead to the conclusion of brain waves.

Coenen, Anton, Edward Fine, and Oksana Zayachkivska. "Adolf Beck: A Forgotten Pioneer In Electroencephalography." Journal Of The History Of The Neurosciences 23.3 (2014): 276-286. Academic Search Complete. Web. 11 Feb. 2015.

2) Limitations: Site sentence "EEG has several limitations. Most important is its poor spatial resolution."

Kondylis, Efstathios D., et al. "Detection Of High-Frequency Oscillations By Hybrid Depth Electrodes In Standard Clinical Intracranial EEG Recordings." Frontiers In Neurology 5.(2014): 1-10. Academic Search Complete. Web. 11 Feb. 2015.

3) Normal activity, above the chart add: Waveforms are subdivided into bandwidths known as alpha, beta, theta, and delta to signify the majority of the EEG used in clinical practice.

Tatum, William O. "Ellen R. Grass Lecture: Extraordinary EEG." Neurodiagnostic Journal 54.1 (2014): 3-21. Academic Search Complete. Web. 11 Feb. 2015.

4) Relative Advantages: EEG prevents limited availability of technologists to provide immediate care in high traffic hospitals.

Schultz, Teal L. "Technical Tips: MRI Compatible EEG Electrodes: Advantages, Disadvantages, And Financial Feasibility In A Clinical Setting." Neurodiagnostic Journal 52.1 (2012): 69-81. Academic Search Complete. Web. 11 Feb. 2015. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dfleur (talk • contribs) 01:50, 12 February 2015 (UTC)


 * Great choice! Josef Horáček (talk) 18:10, 10 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Your sources are excellent. Josef Horáček (talk) 00:05, 17 February 2015 (UTC)

In need of a lead section. Transparent eyeball — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dfleur (talk • contribs) 05:09, 20 February 2015 (UTC)

The page talks about a range of topics, but is very bubbly. Most of the page only talks about one book, and briefly mentions other translations of the transparent eyeball. However, the application section is heavily weighted toward photography. I found that the idea of the transparent eyeball is explained well, but each individual section of the page does not explain it well enough alone.

Lead to Transparent eye
The transparent eyeball is a philosophical metaphor originated by Ralph Waldo Emerson. The transparent eyeball is a representation of an eye that is absorbent rather than being reflective, therefor takes in all that nature has to offer. Emerson’s intention is for an individual to become one with nature, and the transparent eyeball is a tool to do that. In the book “Nature”, Emerson explains that the meaning behind the transparent eyeball is similar to a scientific standpoint on the Bible. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dfleur (talk • contribs) 19:21, 24 February 2015 (UTC)
 * A great start, but there's room for improvement: 1. Bring the last sentence to the front (first or second sentence). It's where the concept is actually explained. And the sentence currently in second place could go last. See if that makes sense. 2. Proofread. "Standpoint" is one word, the Bible is capitalized. Josef Horáček (talk) 07:30, 1 March 2015 (UTC)
 * You need to proofread more carefully. Good job otherwise. Josef Horáček (talk) 13:21, 10 March 2015 (UTC)