User talk:Dgill952/sandbox

Caitlin's Peer Review
Epidemiology 1: Need to tie in more epidemiological information. I like how you re-capped the information from the previous paragraphs, but try to make that flow into an actual epidemiology statistic!

Epidemiology 2: Just some small sentence restructuring to make it flow a bit better! For example: “In a 2014 surveillance and active monitoring of sleeping sickness in many countries, it was found that the number of reported cases of the disease has declined.The expected number of cases for 2014 was thought to be 5,000, but only 3,797 cases were reported. At this rate, sleeping sickness elimination by 2020 is a possibility.” Also, do you know where the cases were reported?

Epidemiology 3: Repeated statistic that was similar to the one used in the second epidemiology section, so try combining the two.

Overall, you did a good job using current research articles and statistics. You could keep the first statistic of the original article about the decrease from 1990 to 2010, or make a little timeline to show from the 1990’s to 2014, just gives you more statistical information to back up your thought of elimination by 2020!

Peer Review
What are some less affected countries, and why is that? What causes transmission to be confined spatially? Why does it impact rural areas more? Change the word "reach" to "reached" in the second to last section. What were the number of cases in 2000? Is the 86% reduction just for the Democratic Republic or for all of the Sub Saharan?

Overall, great job. Make sure to add clarity to some of the sentences listed. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jburnsi14 (talk • contribs) 05:26, 20 November 2017 (UTC)