User talk:DianaChiu/sandbox

Notes on section of your wiki page.

Performance and Publication Section

- Very good and too the point, good use of listen the actors who played the roles in the production.

Historical Section

- Maybe in your first point add what lead to them needing more efficient work in tax regulations and military planning? Could bring an insight of what was going on at this time.

-In your second point the word "open" should be written in the past tense ---> "opened". Also instead of a comma at the end of "Hedge School" add a period to start a new sentence.

Notes Section

- Very good change you've made to add the in the language issue in this article. I find it allows the readers to better understand the article.

Language, Identity and Culture Section

- Is there a way that you could tell the reader why there are certain passages in this article written in Latin and Ancient Greek?

Overall good job with the changes you've made and really good reference page too!

Emeraldhutton (talk) 15:38, 17 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi

Very promising work here. The idea to add a section on language, identity and culture is excellent. Be careful in the historical section not to repeat info on other wiki pages. Please correct the link to Ian Rickman (an Australian footballer!) as I assume it is Alan Rickman who directed the play (you will need to fact check this). Overall - great work. Looking forward to seeing this develop. EmerOToole (talk) 17:22, 18 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi

Great work adding the historical reference to the ordinance survey and also correcting the director for the recent Olivier production.

A little more care is needed with your written expression in the section on language and identity.

The first sentence needs to relate more fully to the play. Instead of saying that a change from the Hedge-school system "is depicted" (which isn't quite true) you might explain that the creation of the new state school is spoken about by the Hedge school master. The ordinance survey Anglicization of Gaelic place names also needs to be mentioned here. The link between the penal laws and the new education system is not immediately apparent from your text.

The final paragraph about the indifference of the Irish people in the play to the mapping/renaming project is biased. I am not sure if you are basing this interpretation on Declan Kiberd. If so, you need to pay a little more attention to the difference between an academic argument and a fact. If this is your own interpretation, I would ask you to consider the following questions: what is the attitude of Manus? Of Hugh? How do these attitudes differ to Máire's fiery insistence that she needs to learn English? Where are the Donnelly twins? Does Doalty know where they are? Why is Yolland missing at the end of the play? When Owen leaves at the end of the play, where is he going? We will talk through these questions next week, and our discussion should help you to address the question of language and identity in Translations more fully.EmerOToole (talk) 14:24, 1 November 2018 (UTC)

Hey you might want to check #13 and #29 in "Notes for a Future Edition of Brian Friel's Translations" - Andrews corrects some of the claims Friel makes in Translations about the effect on language the Ordnance Survey had. Charlesjgao (talk) 04:27, 11 November 2018 (UTC)

Hi

Just a note to encourage you to use the feedback above the redraft the valuable section on language and identity that you intend to contribute to the page. EmerOToole (talk) 18:33, 21 November 2018 (UTC)