User talk:Dianaleaney/sandbox

Leaney- Tonally it was fantastic, you nailed it with keeping the tone unbiased and encyclopedic. I really only came across two grammar bits that I’d change, the rest looked great.

I would change “they are mostly intended to be role models that everyone adore and promote a desirable image of fantastical happiness” To “they are mostly intended to be role models that everyone adores and they promote a desirable image of fantastical happiness”

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“In English, a "drama" is often seen as a piece of literature or play that has a twist or conflict that results in Japanese Television Drama (テレビドラマ) is not defined as "Drama" in English” To "In English, a "drama" is often seen as a piece of literature or play that has a twist or conflict that results in Japanese Television Drama (テレビドラマ) not being defined as "Drama" in English” Juwhit (talk) 23:27, 6 April 2018 (UTC) -Julian

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This is looking good Leaney. It's especially difficult to create material from scratch, so I appreciate your efforts here. As you revise, I'd like you to think about what you think is the most general or important information to know about things like Japanese television or idols. For example, in the television section you talk about dramas, but that maybe doesn't capture the Japanese television scene as a whole. What about variety shows, quiz shows, documentaries, food shows, anime, etc etc? You don't have to go into detail about these things, but broadly mentioning them could be helpful. Ctextor at uofu (talk) 17:05, 10 April 2018 (UTC)