User talk:Diazel/sandbox

Thelma and Elyse, A very informative article on an interesting topic. It's obvious that you put a lot of good work and research into it.

Three improvements: 1. Make sure to cite your sources! There was a lot of information, especially statistics, that did not have any kind of source. 2. Break up the text--this may be a personal opinion, but I would break up the giant texts blocks a little, just to make it a little more reader-friendly. 3. Don't focus on explaining things that aren't directly related to your specific topic--there's probably a page explaining the BII test and the concepts of Language and identity. You can use these for support, but I wouldn't spend so much time and space explaining them.

Three things you did well: 1. There is so much research! Everything idea you had was backed up by some kind of research or example, which was fantastic. 2. The sections were broken up in a logical manner--good organization of topics! 3. Everything was explained in detail and very easy to understand. This page would definitely serve as a good source of information for your average Wikipedia user.

Kefabian (talk) 23:52, 16 November 2012 (UTC)