User talk:Dixon.Dominic/sandbox

Draft feedback
Hi, Dominic! You're adding excellent detailed information to this article so far, really useful and specific. My biggest suggestions as you continue adding to and revising this are: --organizing information and transitioning between sections/ideas for clarity --citing sources as you continue to add information (observation and practical usage details are most of what you have in this draft so far, and you don't need to cite those). What else are you planning to add? History? Different versions of this tool? Usage in different situations? --moving to third person language. There are a number of "you" pronouns in here...try shifting them to third person or neutral language instead. Here's an example from the current draft: "Below that you will find...." Shifting this to third person language might look like, "Below that, users will find...." Shifting it to neutral (non-person) language might look like, "Below that can be found...." or "Below that is...."

Let me know if you have any questions as you continue to work on this, and I look forward to seeing what you continue adding to it! Nicoleccc (talk) 01:38, 3 November 2018 (UTC)