User talk:Dkehoe27

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Ninespine Stickleback
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ninespine_stickleback

View the article history: what do you observe? (a sentence or two)

The page was initially created in November 2007 and has been edited 50 times between then and November 2015. There are only two sections though, four total paragraphs, so its suprising that its been edited so many times.

View the talk page for the article: what do you observe? (a sentence or two)

It is part of the WikiProject Fishes, rated at “starter” quality and of low importance.

Evaluate elements of the article: score it according to the good signs and bad signs of an article in the reading 'Evaluating Wikipedia' (a few sentences) The limited material that is in the article is well written, there is not too much fluffy language and the information is organized to the point of the individual subtitles. There is no information strictly from primary research, it is strictly information that is not controversial and would be agreed upon by the scientific community. The lack of variety in references is not a good sign.

Aside from whether you think it a good article or bad article, do you find things you would like to correct, change, add? (a few sentences)

The article definitely needs generally more information, specifically more subtopics to describe the ninespine stickleback. For example, information on its physiology would be very informative, especially since similar species have broad salinity tolerances. Potentially more information on distribution and habitats of the species would be helpful. Most importantly, there needs to be more references, to create a larger variety of sources from where the information is coming from, since three of the four referenced articles are from the same author.

Dkehoe27 (talk) 15:22, 11 March 2016 (UTC)


 * I agree with most of the above listed information. In addition there is by and far a lack of citations.  Information is presented and although the source may be present in the references section it is not actually cited in the article, and could constitute a type of plagiarism.
 * Also, the I'd argue the description section is too general and contains information that should be spread out into other sections including habitat and morphology.
 * SeanGosselin (talk) 15:36, 11 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Delaney, thanks for a complete evaluation of the ninespine article; I have assigned it to you for your wiki work this semester. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rico.schultz (talk • contribs) 18:27, 18 March 2016 (UTC)

Delaney, thanks for adding a little info to the chloride cell page. It's a terrible page but your change is a good small start. Rico.schultz (talk) 18:07, 5 April 2016 (UTC)

Physiology
The Ninespine Stickleback is a euryhaline and euryhthermal species of teleost fish, occupying both freshwater and marine habitats in higher latitudes of the world. Recently, this species has been under great examination due to pond populations' adaptations of morphology, life history, and behavior which separates them from their marine conspecifics. Many recently isolated populations (<11,000 years) have been studied to identify ranges of phenotypic plasticity and possible genetic drift between populations. It has been found that marine populations exhibit metabolic rate reduction when in colder conditions, in addition to having an elevated hepatosomatic index (HSI) at all temperature conditions as compared to freshwater populations. In addition, certain freshwater pond populations have shown to be able to metabolically compensate for a wide range of temperatures, six degrees Celsius to nineteen degrees Celsius. Such physiological differences between populations has not been determined to be exclusively due to plasticity or generic changes; however, there has been found to be significant genetic diversity between marine and freshwater populations.

Due to their climatic versatility, Ninespine Stickleback face much variation in dissolved oxygen in their environment. Ninespines are physoclists, so they lack a connection between their swim bladder and their digestive tract. Responses to hypoxia may include increased ventilation rate or slower gill perfusion. This means they cannot gulp air from the surface of the water, as physostome fish do, in order to compensate for an environment of low dissolved oxygen. Ninespines must rely solely on their gas secretion and absorption abilities, using aquatic surface respiration (ASR) when facing a hypoxic situation. ASR is when the fish rise almost to the surface to ventilate with the top millimeter of water which is high in dissolved oxygen. Ninespine Stickleback do not regularly experience nocturnal hypoxia in their natural environments, and therefore, have slower and decreased control of their swim-bladder lift, beginning ASR at a much higher dissolves oxygen concentration, in hypoxic environments as compared to other stickleback species, such as the Brook Stickleback.

Comments
-ASR should have an embedded link to an article to define the term, rather than defining in the paragraph (if possible.)

-I don't believe fish names should be capitalized, unless they are scientific names, so I think you can remove capitalization in a number of places. (I checked a couple other pages, and this seems to be the general trend.)

-Check through the paragraph again just to make sure, but if there is a term or index that is undefined, make sure you embed a link or define it if the page does not exist.

SeanGosselin (talk) 01:40, 29 April 2016 (UTC)

@Dkehoe27: Delaney, thanks for your comments on Sean's Remora contribution. Please take a moment and also look at Adam's contribution on lampreys. I'll set Sean straight about capitalizing common names of fish. Rico.schultz (talk) 13:34, 29 April 2016 (UTC)

@Dkehoe27: Delaney, I see that you added your draft contribution to the talk page for the Ninespine Stickleback article. In case you hadn't done so, I clicked 'request feedback' in the template box under the Bibliography heading and asked to alert Ian. Rico.schultz (talk) 17:25, 3 May 2016 (UTC)

Feedback
Nice work on your sandbox draft. I made some small copyedits; I made a small edit in keeping with Wikipedia's style guide - references go after punctuation, not before, and there isn't supposed to be a space between them. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:38, 3 May 2016 (UTC)