User talk:DkendraS/Sexual anorexia/Mcontris Peer Review

DkendraS, Overall, I think you’re doing a great job with your article so far. The second contribution I see that you have made, “the term largely exists in a colloquial sense…”, is a great way to add a little more detail than what the other writers had given previously. I am also impressed that you found a place where someone had previously plagiarized and you were able to re-format that information in a different way. I would just make sure that you also have not plagiarized as the information is quite similar. A suggestion I would give is maybe linking a definition of “inflated sense of self” your average person may not know what you mean by that. I also noticed in the third paragraph the sentence starting after “A link to narcissism, sexual anorexia, and sexual addiction has been discussed by researchers who propose that the two disorders share an inflated sense of self.” you have “anorectics” which I believe is a spelling error and should be anorexics. Another thing I think the article could use is more about the causes of sexual anorexia. There is one sentence telling the causes, but how do those things cause sexual anorexia. Overall, great job.