User talk:Dmarbury94/essay

Comments on Essay
I enjoyed your part about the contributions. I see you had quite a bit of a rough time with your information, but am very glad you were able to get help, and figure out how to make sure your information was completely correct. The essay flowed very well, transitioning through each paragraph. Each section was labeled, and I was able to follow the whole thing with ease. All important questions were answered in the essay, and I even learned some new things from it. I like your general feedback section, and agree that the adding and removing of information is the one thing that stands between Wikipedia being as awesome as it can be, however it is a work in progress! Amay1355 (talk) 16:15, 26 November 2018 (UTC)

Dmarbury94's Essay review by Fabdoull
Overall, your essay talks about everything we did on Wikipedia this semester. I like the way through your essay, one can see the progress you did in the class because you said you struggled with your first article which was deleted from Wikipedia and ended by writing a second one which was approved to appear on the frontpage. On the other hand, there are some little things that you can do to ameliorate your essay. The structure respects the guideline but it is not smooth and digestible because it looks like 4 different blocks summarizing each part on the semester. You should consider using transition words from one paragraph to another to help change that. Also, add an introduction and a Conclusion since it is an essay. Finally, the last paragraph is a bit unclear because it looks more like a conclusion. Other than that, your essay already has all the content we were asked to use in this assignment and it was nice learning about your experiences on Wikipedia.Fabdoull (talk) 12:36, 26 November 2018 (UTC)

Yes but...
...I'm sure you were surprised when you found that the essays you were supposed to review the essays by, , and , and none of those exist... Dr Aaij (talk) 23:27, 8 December 2018 (UTC)