User talk:Dmastronardi/sandbox

Your paragraphs were well written and portrayed the information in a tone that seems fitting for a Wikipedia article. The only critiques I can offer would be to write about another collector/writer involved in Russian fairy tales and to add more sources to your section. Other than that, I think that your work seems solid!Amayarz (talk) 21:15, 31 March 2019 (UTC)

Yea there's good volume here. I think naming and linking the great authors that you mention at bottom would really emphasize the impact of Afanasyev. Also good job on not making it about the life of Afanasyev and mostly about his influence with Russian fairy tales. And I agree with Amaya, maybe adding another author and good use of links. Mlazarus14 (talk) 22:59, 31 March 2019 (UTC)

I think that you did a really good job with your section. The only things I would say would be to change "apart" in the first paragraph to "a part," and in the second paragraph, in the last two sentences, explain who some of the great authors were who came out of this history of folklore. Otherwise, I think that you have a lot of great links and citations. Montananelson (talk) 14:14, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Going into more detail about this author's specific tales could help enrich your section more. Just more detail is my only suggestion, you have good information. Maddywright (talk) 14:16, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

I think you should add a little more description about the hyperlinks. For example, giving a little more information about "Vladimir Dahl" or "Church Slavonic's" to help the reader. Sallyfried (talk) 14:19, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

This is very concise and very information driven. My only grammatical recommendations are to change "and only religious text was allowed to be spread" to "could only be spread" since the original is passive voice. also when you mention the "Grimms' Tales" it's Grimm's Tales. I would also add a link to that. Rebxlee (talk) 14:29, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

I think you should add more authors and compare their work and their different impacts. Give a brief description of their life and how it played into their work. You should also add sources. 1oromo (talk) 14:33, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Since fairy tales usually have imagery either on the front page or within the book, you might want to insert an image of a fairy tale such as the Russian Grimm's fairy tale. The paragraphs are well written but you might want to change the title to something a little more specific. Charlieaabrams (talk) 14:38, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

I'm not sure if your other members are doing other writers, but if they are, you could consider making subheadings for the writers. If you could find more sources, that would also strengthen your information. Caranlee (talk) 14:43, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

I would try to incorporate more sources. Adding pictures could enhance your page. Could possibly add more personal information about the writer, or add information on some of the fairytales he has written. Mtatherton18 (talk) 14:57, 3 April 2019 (UTC)