User talk:Dmitchellpsych/Deafness in France

Informal feedback as on 9/27: you've clearly made a lot of progress since our last conversation - very nice! I like the general structure, although I can imagine that as it continues to solidify, you might move some points to different sections than there are at present, and/or subdivide existing sections. If you were submitting this right now as your draft (which I know you're not), my main concern would be the lack of in-text citations. I recommend just getting in the habit of citing things as soon as you put them in: that's gonna save you time down the road (no need to try to figure out where you found a particular fact), and it protects you from allegations of inadequate sourcing. I'd also encourage you to start drafting your "lead" section - it'd be nice to see at least a working version of that by Friday. Matthall.research (talk) 23:07, 27 September 2021 (UTC)

Hello Dylan, Looking at your wiki article so far, I think your outline looks really good. I think all the headers you have are really important discussion points, and the only suggestion I would have is maybe to add the medical treatment available in France for the DHH community. It might also be worthwhile to add experiences from DHH people in France described by themselves if you can find that type of source, I know I had issues finding that information from my region. Your organization is well done as well because reading through your bullet points I think they are all under the correct sections. I think your points are very good at encompassing the whole topic because I definitely feel more educated on Deafness in France after looking at your outline, and I have no prior knowledge on this subject. Looking at your outline points you have a variety of references in each section which will strengthen your points because it is not just from one source. Lastly, I am not sure if I could just not find it, but your bibliography is blank so just do not forget to fill that in! Really interesting work so far! MorganTurchetta (talk) 19:48, 12 October 2021 (UTC)