User talk:DoctorKarpiak/sandbox/CRM447WFall2020Group2

Hi there!

I am posting my article selections below to view in order to pick one going forward. Let me know what you think. User:Hrbrod/sandbox

Hrbrod (talk) 23:42, 13 October 2020 (UTC)Hanna Brodeur 10/13/20

=Peer Review and Feedback== I think this selection is topically appropriate and of appropriate length. What do you plan to do to it? DoctorKarpiak (talk) 16:03, 16 November 2020 (UTC)

=Peer Review= Hi Group 2, I think that community alienation is a great section to work on. You guys could definitely improve the article to make it flow a lot better. The original article repeats the phrase "research indicates" which I think makes it sound stilted. This section has a lot of scholarly sources so it seems like a well researched topic. I am sure you could add more information from even more scholarly sources. They also never clearly state what community alienation means. What does it mean to be isolated from a community? Good luck to you guys. Nsmith71 (talk) 07:28, 17 November 2020 (UTC)

Thank you for the feedback! I do agree the article sounds a little choppy and editing it to be more concise will help it flow better. The article does seem a little too choppy and stiff. I like your idea of clearing defining what community alienation is, I will try to look into that a little more to see if I can add anything to that. Thanks, @Nsmith! Hrbrod (talk) 23:14, 29 November 2020 (UTC)

Peer Review
I think this section of the article was a good choice. I'm not sure what you would want to edit here. I think it is good the way that it is. You could possibly add more sources and just maybe add to the information. Good job. Studyhard24 (talk) 02:11, 18 November 2020 (UTC)

Thank you for the response! I will take a closer look at the section and edit what is necessary. Hrbrod (talk) 23:14, 29 November 2020 (UTC)