User talk:Domgalletti/sandbox

A good start here, Dom. I think that some of this content could be broken up into shorter paragraphs (centered around a single topic sentence) in order to make the material a bit more accessible to readers. Also, when summarizing research, you can present it in a slightly different way from your literature review (instead of noting "One study argues X..."--you could instead offer the claim and then just include a citation reference). Happy to discuss this with you further!

Dom: Apologies for the delay, I was not able to access your sandbox until now.

Please see comments below:

1. What does the article (or section) do well?

You did a great job organizing your article and introducing the topic. It is very clear, concise, and informative.

2. What changes would you suggest overall?

It would be interesting to see a breakdown based on decades and how investment strategies evolve overtime and the factors influencing those changes. This "topic" would fall within the age section. 10-20, 20-30, 30-40 (typically saving for college and spending discretionary income on kids, focused on growth/value blend portfolios given risk profiles).

3. What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution?

Introducing each header or explaining it may be helpful rather than starting with according to...

'''4. Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know!'''

I liked the structure, formatting, and word choice. It was technical, digestible, and informative.

Thanks, Ryan