User talk:DopeAmines/sandbox

AL student peer review
Overall, I think the article is very nicely written. The article is well organized, easy to understand, and covers information related to the topic.

As for edits:

Overall: in some instances, the tactical EMS provider is referred to in the singular "the TMP/a TMP" and in other areas, they are referred to as a group "TMPs." I think for readability-sake, it would be nice if this were kept consistent (other than in instances where it is important to emphasize a singular individual vs a group).

For the Lead: there are a couple of acronyms that are not defined or wikilinked, such as "SWAT" and "SERT". Since these both have wiki pages, I think it could be helpful to link them, in case the reader is unfamiliar with these terms. In addition, in the lead, you refer to providers of TEMS as both "Tactical EMS providers" and "Tactical medical providers (TMPs)". While reading this, I am not sure if these refer to the same things or to 2 different roles, although it sounds like these are referring to the same thing. If these are indeed the same roles, I think it would be helpful to use consistent language, and only use "Tactical medical providers (TMPs)" since this is what is used for the rest of the article.

In the History section: I think the sentence "Following the widely publicized active shooter situations such as the Columbine High School massacre, Virginia Tech shooting, and others, major changes took place in law enforcement protocol regarding emergency medical support in the field." could be reworded for better readability. For example, it could read something like: "following widely publicized active shooter situations, such as the Columbine High School Massacre and Virginia Tech Shooting, there were major changes made to law enforcement protocol regarding emergency medical support in the field." I also think this sentence "An additional option, which most closely resembles tactical EMS, is utilizing a person previously trained as a medical practitioner to provide medical support for law enforcement by either integrating them into the team itself or allowing them to treat casualties in a warm zone (a location that is deemed to be a mild risk for sustaining injuries)." could be shortened down for readability, perhaps by deleting the "which most closely resembles tactical EMS")

Future of Tactical EMS section: it would be interesting to see some statistics or additional details if available for this section. Some of the claims are a little generic "Many law enforcement agencies" (how many?) or "the number of law enforcement agencies (...) is expected to continue to grow" (what kind of growth has been seen already or what kind of growth is projected in the future) or "many other countries have adopted a similar tactical EMS model" (what are some example countries?).

References: good use of different types sources (secondary literature, position statements, etc).

Overall, a very informative and well-organized article with good readability.

DopeAmines (talk) 12:39, 13 April 2024 (UTC)