User talk:Dpark29/HNRS1035

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very well written, just a couple of things: "Adult beetles averaging between 1.5 to 1.9 millimeters in length" is an incomplete sentence. "The walnut twig beetle, was first recorded in 1928 in Arizona inhabiting the Arizona walnut tree, Juglans major" does not need a comma in the beginning. The first sentence of the Human Prevention and Spread section is a little lengthy and might work better divided into two sentences. Additionally, make sure your references are in numerical order for the most part HandN6043S (talk) 01:57, 24 October 2013 (UTC)

Sklupp1 Peer Review
Good organization and structure. The content is divided into appropriate sections and the sections work well together. Your contribution is also well written and you have good sources to support it. Sentence structure looks good, just see the comments from the precious review. The writing sounds appropriate for a high school audience and I didn't see any grammatical errors. The writing also sounds neutral and unbiased. I would try to organize your references and link them in the article, so there is a little blue number next to what you are referencing. I'm not exactly sure how to do this but I'm sure Dr. Carmichael could help. Also make sure you are linking to other wikipedia pages that could help add information to your contribution topic. Overall, your contribution looks great. Great work! Sklupp1 (talk) 04:28, 29 October 2013 (UTC)

B.J.Carmichael Feedback
The article is well-written, maintaining neutrality and providing facts. Your peers have provided you with sound feedback as well. Overall, work on clarity of information, organization of ideas, being specific, and sentence length. Some specifics: "It is one of only a few species in the genus Pityophthorus that is associated with hardwoods and the only one associated with Juglans (7)- what is Juglans? "It can easily be distinguished from other members of its genus"- what is "it"? Review your article carefully for other instances of generalization and to improve clarity. Scientific names should appear in italic and the genus name capitalized. Watch formatting including spacing and appropriate method for including references- I will be happy to help you with this. Re-read each section for organizational issues. References are appropriate. Overall, good start.B.J.Carmichael (talk) 19:16, 5 November 2013 (UTC)