User talk:Dpbray2/sandbox

Peer notes/review
I would just suggest maybe finding a simpler way of stating everything, if that makes sense. Everything on wikipedia is almost watered down, in other words its just put in the simplest easiest way to understand possible, in certain parts your draft seems to get just a little wordy. Jpoiry (talk) 04:55, 6 October 2018 (UTC).

Erykah Gandy Peer Review
I think your contribution is really good! When I looked on the wikipedia page I noticed that there wasn't much on it so I don't know if you would want to branch outside of the history too? I'm just thinking of other things that you could possibly add, but your contribution so far is really good! Also, when I looked on the wiki page, it said that there needs to be more citations to verify the information so I don't know if you would want to look more into that as well. Erykah gandy (talk) 21:10, 6 October 2018 (UTC)