User talk:Dr.Wakker/sandbox

Hi, I have some feedback for you!
 * When you copied this article into your sandbox, you didn't first enter "edit mode" for Alice Curtice Moyer. This means that all the reference formatting broke. I've gone through and fixed the references, but it's just good practice in the future to make sure you click "edit" on an article before copying any of it.
 * The biography section is very long and atypical of what we usually see in a general article. Because the entire article is about a person, it itself is a biography. Therefore, it's a bit redundant to name one section of it "biography". Try to see if you can break it up into "Early life" or perhaps "Early life and education" for the beginning of her life. The end of her life can be "Later life and death" or "Death". Any information about her marriage/children could be under a section called "Personal life". Look at article such as Elizabeth Cady Stanton for examples of how to structure a biography.
 * This sentence sounds odd and promotional The Romance of the Road was a bright, entertaining, good book, full of practical knowledge and everyday events which were made so heartfelt and interesting that one felt the better for having read it. "One felt better for having read it" can probably go! It's also a bit out of place to talk about her early life and then sneak in a glowing review of her book before going back to her early life. Don't worry, I know that it was like this before you edited it :) I'd probably just remove this whole thing for being out of place and promotional.
 * Moyer was the eldest of six children; five were born in Missouri; they lived on the homestead until she was fifteen, when her parents moved into the county seat so their children could have a better education, but the teaching was meagre and the instruction of her father aided her more than her schooling This is a very long sentence!
 * I feel like her parents' names should be up in the beginning where they're being described. Seems out of place to describe them, talk about her siblings, and then name the parents a paragraph later.
 * I agree that there is excessive genealogical detail in the sentences enclosed in Through a daughter of Rev. Stephen Bachelde....J. G. Whittier and other writers. Feel free to delete.
 * Information on her death is currently within the career section
 * For biographies, be sure to refer to the subject by their surname. Using their first name has been judged as sounding too "familiar" and thus unencyclopedic
 * I see a lot of opportunities for adding links. I like to have at least one link per paragraph, and sometimes many more than that!
 * The titles of newspapers/magazines are italicized (Scribner's Magazine ) and article titles/chapters of books are within quotation marks ("When a Woman is the Head")

Let me know if you have questions about any of this feedback! Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 03:51, 25 July 2019 (UTC)

Hi Elysia - I'm not even sure this is the right place to put a reply to you! I did some searching and couldn't quickly find instructions for replying to talk page comments ... I just wanted to say thanks! But also heads up - I won't be returning to edit this article for a while. I am struggling with vision and it is currently very difficult to do computer work. I'll say more in an email or on slack. Thanks.
 * sorry to hear about your vision problems! I hope it all gets resolved soon. FYI you send someone a notification by typing Things enclosed in the double curly brackets are called templates  and the name of the template is "ping". After ping and the pipe symbol "|" you type in the user name of who you want to notify. I'm always around if you need assistance, even after the course ends. Good luck and thanks for joining us :) Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:54, 25 July 2019 (UTC)