User talk:DrSheHulk/Artificial intelligence arms race

Draft Feedback
Hi This is a really excellent start with your draft! Great work. I've got just a few recommendations before moving it live:
 * Your intuition is on-point: if you can summarize the content of the quotes into sentences, I think that would be more effective for this section of the article (especially the second quote)
 * When you walk through the points, I'd recommend referring to them in a uniform way (currently the draft uses "the first point," "Point 2", "and the third risk"). Making them all the same would help with clarity
 * The links are excellent - not too many, used exactly when they should be
 * I think the last paragraph before the quote works well as a closing for this section. If you decide to keep that second quote, I would consider adding another concluding sentence after. Ending a section with a complex quote like that feels like leaving things unresolved. It's your call!

Once you've incorporated this feedback, feel free to move this live! Will (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:25, 9 November 2020 (UTC)