User talk:DragonDale/sandbox

DragonDale great article selection, looking forward to seeing how you improve it! Gardneca (talk) 07:02, 12 March 2019 (UTC)


 * good work finding the The Irish Ecclesiastical Record for your Warumbe article. Remember, for the "Add a Citation" exercise, you need to actually write a sentence and then add the new citation at the end of it. You can do this in the sandbox. Gardneca (talk) 00:18, 29 March 2019 (UTC)

Overall, it is a good improvement to the Warumbe page, which I had read before when I was trying to decide what article to work with. I like that you included additional details to enhance the reader's understanding of the story. I particularly liked the passage about Warumbe stomping his feet to create craters that he then hid in. I like the inclusion of the second Warumbe story for context, supporting his station as the origin of death. I think that you could maybe add even a few more links to other Wiki pages, such as for the word "millet". Perhaps in the intro, when you mention what the name translates to, you could mention the language that they speak, and then hyper-link that as well, since the Ganda language-Luganda does have a page. If you wanted to make it a longer article, perhaps include a little context about the country (countries) of the Ganda culture (Buganda/Uganda), such as their location in Africa. I think it would help people reading it to be able to imagine the area of its creation. If there was no available pictures that fit your myth, this might allow you to insert a small map of Uganda for visual appeal, if you wanted. In addition, since the article is a more obscure subject matter, and therefore smaller, that might help beef it up and allow for the creation of the table of contents that we see on some of the example pages. Though I see that you have included references, I think that a fuller bibliography needs to be utilized. I am no expert on Wikipedia, so I tried looking at the Ida B. Wells page when reviewing yours, to make sure my comments are appropriate. Great job so far! You&#39;ve got Koalatee (talk) 00:13, 13 April 2019 (UTC)

Thanks, You&#39;ve got Koalatee for your excellent review. DragonDale these are all great suggestions to improve your article and take it to the next level. On the main page (not your sandbox) you'll have to clean up the citations, they're a bit of a mess. Once you incorporate these changes (and I see you've started already, excellent work), your big task will be to really do a deep dive for additional bibliographic sources. I know you used the first one I gave you, was the second one any good? Also remember you can add a line about the modern film I showed in class if you like, and see whether you can find more on that (link in Laulima). Keep up the great work! Gardneca (talk) 06:51, 17 April 2019 (UTC)