User talk:Dressytea/Lustreware

Hello Dressytea, I was assigned to peer review your article but did not find it in your sandbox draft box. Please let me know if it is posted somewhere else.

Getting Someone's Attention on a Talk Page
Hi @Dressytea, I noticed that @Ptcoyle17 was trying to get your attention above. Be sure to use the "@" symbol to tag someone and sign off using "~" (tilde) four times. ProfTern (talk) 22:22, 29 November 2023 (UTC)

Suggestion for specificity
Hi @Dressytea I noticed that in your paragraph you say "at this time" what is the time period or place that you mean here? ProfTern (talk) 00:03, 1 December 2023 (UTC)

Was it the pots or the people?
Hi @Dressytea, your writing on the influence of Islamic lustreware on Western Europe is looking great! One area that may need clarification is where you say that the artisans from Malaga surpassed [the technical abilities of (?) means of production (?) sheer output (?) of] the Muslim potters. Changing this wording will make the statement more precise and less about comparing people, which might play into controversial stereotypes. Have you given any thought to how you are going to place this section? Will it still go under the heading "Islamic lustreware"? It might make sense to add a final sentence underlining how the inclusion of Maiolica was by way of explanation of cross-cultural connections (add a link to the Maiolica page as well!). ProfTern (talk) 01:45, 3 December 2023 (UTC)


 * Hi, thanks for the input, I think I misinterpreted the original source since it had some complicated wording, but I found another source that allowed me to understand and fix that. Also, I decided to put it under "Islamic Lusterware" under the subtitle "Islamic Spain". Let me know what you think of the edits, and what more I need before adding to the actual article, thanks!
 * -Dressytea (talk) 00:54, 5 December 2023 (UTC)
 * @Dressytea this new subsection is looking great! A few picky things - put "sgrañtto" it italics since it is a foreign word in the middle of English text and double check it's spelling (should it be "sgrañatto"?). The quoted material doesn't quite align with the sentence as the verbs stand (potters "used" and "employing" are not in the same grammatical tense). Since the quoted material just seems to be a list, and you have clearly cited the source of the list, why don't you rewrite it into a more sensible sentence or two. Maybe something along the lines of, "Muslim potters made use of a variety of techniques including glazing, sgrañatto, and lustreware, whereas Christian potters tended to produce plain vessels. Similarly, whereas Muslim potters used a variety of forms - from toys to large storage jars - Christian potters seem to have focused on vessels for cooking and storing water." Also double check your spacing before and after citations (there shouldn't be any). Hope this helps! ProfTern (talk) 17:34, 5 December 2023 (UTC)