User talk:Drmargi/John Reese (Person of Interest)

Possible changes
Following are a few sentence structure changes for your perusal. IMO the difficult thing with a series is like this is trying to not be too certain about character traits etc since they could change a few episodes from now - or wildly by next season. Please note that I have not worked on a character article in years so I may be wrongly applying guidelines from one area of WikiP to another. Also I would not insist on any of these - I think you have done a superb job on this. Congrats. MarnetteD | Talk 04:07, 2 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "Reese is an intense, solitary man with a dry sense of humor" to "Reese is an intense, solitary man who is revealed to have a dry sense of humor" - mostly because it takes several episodes for us to see it and get used to it.
 * "possibly when he began service in the CIA. According to his military records" and " but he is believed to have no living family" - Sentences with words like possibly and believed tend to bump in to WP:SPECULATION. I would be inclined to leave them out until future storylines give us a definitive answer.
 * The last paragraph has "relationship develops" and "friendship develops" in it. There is nothing wrong with that but one of my quirks is that I try to not use the same phrasing like that which is why a Thesaurus is always close at hand.


 * Thank you! That's just the kind of feedback I was hoping for.  A fresh set of eyes catches the little things overlooked as we read something over and over, and more importantly, sees the big picture.  You're right about develops/develops; I've made the fixes you suggested.  I really appreciate your time and feedback!  --Drmargi (talk) 19:31, 2 March 2013 (UTC)