User talk:Dsilvas3/sandbox

Hi! I enjoyed reading your sandbox and I liked having the insight of your topic proposal before I read your edits. I would suggest proofreading your edits to correct grammatical errors (I noticed a few throughout the beginning sections). I would also say to be cautious of your word choice to assure that you aren't adding any opinion-based statements. It's important to make sure your additions to the article are objective and not biased. I also wanted to mention that in the section titled "Women's Right Beginning" it might be helpful to add a bit more detail to the second sentence. I would expand on your sentence: "Since the 1840s women have been struggling to obtain women's rights." I think it would be good for your article if you talked a bit more about the specific rights that women struggled to obtain because the current sentence is too general and does not give readers enough background information. I think you have identified and incorporated great points into your edits for the article! Cjames2020 (talk) 08:02, 23 November 2020 (UTC)