User talk:Dtaylo78/sandbox

Drew, The contribution is a start. What's missing is an explanation for why white working class voters were persuaded to vote and vote for Republicans in the last two elections. Why would white working class voters vote for a party that advocates for policies that directly harm them - cutting their health care, raising their share of the social safety net, reducing regulations that protect them, and adopting policies that increase inequality. Why does the white working class vote against its financial interests? Stylistically, the contribution needs to be proof read several more times. Read it aloud and try to remove words that are unnecessary. Cassell04 (talk) 13:48, 14 March 2019 (UTC)

Article Evaluation: Capitalism

Edit history shows that the article is consistently updated.

The article has lots of detail about different kinds of capitalism and the history of the economic system.

There are many reliable references, which are easily found.

The article has both quality and quantity in its content.

The article attempts to be neutral by also including a section on the criticisms of the system.

I believe the article could be considered at worst a C class article, I would consider it a B class article.

Article Evaluation:

I find your choice of the article very interesting. I think that many people use the terms 'working class, middle class, white collar, blue collar regularly, and as the article mentions, these terms are loosely defined. Many individuals grasp these income or labor demographics in different lenses when they look at others, and even when they consider themselves. Where one thinks they may align in the scheme of things may be very different from where society has actually placed them

Perhaps, although it may be challenging to find a standardized, agreed upon analysis; you could include more of the specifics. What income levels comprise of the working class to the majority of the population? Maybe include salary levels, habits, lifestyles, tax contributions, more of what they do and where they live?

The working class's political agenda and how they have affected elections is interesting as well. I think the article is off to a good start. Personally, I find graphics such as charts and diagrams to be effective in conveying a lot of information in a short amount of time. Anything you can find that may support your article visually will add depth. Royo322 (talk) Arroyo —Preceding undated comment added 19:41, 10 March 2019 (UTC)

Article Evaluation:

I am very impressed by the additions to the article. I think the inclusion of data relating to the 2016 election is great. Also, the writing style is very clear, concise and neutral in tone which is great. However, I would definitely like to see the addition of some non-quantitative data in the article. I think perhaps expanding or adding a section about culture would be helpful. Adding to the pre-recent history would be interesting as well. You could also maybe expand on demographics of the working class a bit more, although a lot of that is already covered.

Overall, I think the article has been vastly improved. Polymoog19 (talk) 20:13, 10 March 2019 (UTC)

Matthew Drago's Peer Review 3/10/19
Your draft is well done, both on its own and with all the variants inside the sandbox. The writing, as stated above, is concise and does not appear to have anything it does not need. Your brief, factual statements add a good deal to the article, though I do think that an increase in length is needed. The history of the working class in America is not at all a static one - the article's section on history starts at the 1970s and barely touches on the turbulent first half of the twentieth century. Labor History of the United States is an excellently detailed page that you might be able to draw inspiration from.

Grammatically, I can't find any faults in your work. Nor can I find any stylistic errors. It seems like a solid draft that can easily be expanded upon into an excellent article.

Matthewdrago (talk) 02:37, 11 March 2019 (UTC)