User talk:Duff0610/sandbox

Your article overall is clear, succinct, and easy to read/understand. Your article is properly organized given that you are writing a biography, and your sources are appropriate and follow Wiki's guidelines.

If you can find any sources for it, I think it would be great to add a section about Semenow's work as a women's rights activist, since this is touched upon in your first paragraph.

When you go to publish your article, I would change your headings from sub-headings to regular headings. This will make your article easier to follow and will better break up the sections with the lines under each heading that cross the entire page.

In the "First Female PhD Recipient at California Institute of Technology" section, the sentence "Semenow ended up working under renowned physical organic chemist..." sounds a bit informal/wordy. This sentence could be changed to "However, renowned physical chemist John D. Roberts insisted on her acceptance into the program." Another change in word choice that would make this section flow a bit better would be changing "Roberts went on to say that..." to "Roberts later commented that..."

My final suggestion would be to reformat the "Awards and Honors" section. Currently, the section begins by listing out some awards that Semenow has received in her lifetime, followed by one full sentence after the list. I think that the listing style is great but should be used throughout the section to detail all the awards in the same format. Prior to the start of the list, you could also put in a sentence or two describing what you are about to list (generally it's best to not let the list "stand alone" with no context before).

Other than these changes, the content of your article is good! Happy to see more articles being written about women in STEM who may not receive enough recognition :)

Pfaffmr (talk) 16:28, 18 November 2019 (UTC)