User talk:DuneBuggy123/sandbox

Peer Review Ben Chance: 1. Neutral Content: Maybe find another word that described the pectoral and back muscles of the bat instead of "impressive", not a big deal but could potentially be seen as some form of bias. Maybe talk about how they rely on the strength of these muscles in order to fly. Other than that no other noticeable bias.

2. Reliable Sources: All of your sources came from peer-reviewed articles in journals so you are looking good.

3. Structure: Is this draft well organized? Can you follow it easily? Yes, the draft is well organized. It is clear that you are interested in flight among bats, primarily focused on the muscle groups that allow for flight.

What pages will be edited? It is not exactly clear what pages you will add this draft to/edit so that could be something to mention. Maybe list out 3-4 articles that could potentially benefit from being edited.

What sorts of contributions with regard to images are planned? There is not any proposal of media of any kind being added in your proposed edits. Maybe finding non-copyrighted pictures of these bat muscles could be useful.

Do you see where this content might fit from the information provided? As I previously stated I am not sure what article will be edited with this information stated and that is something that you could potentially clear up.

4. Integration: Does anything link up with something you or your team is working on? How can you help each other? We are both dealing with muscle groups and their importance to carry out a specific action. For you guys, it is flight and pectoral/back muscles while I am focusing on chewing/mastication and facial muscles. I don't necessarily think that we could help each other.

Do they link to other relevant pages in the text of their draft? There are no links to other wiki articles in their draft so this could be improved as well.

Peer Review Sloane Pruett: Hi Nicholas, I enjoyed looking over your draft of your potential edits. For my suggestions I think it may be beneficial to add the original text in your sandbox along with your draft. This may make the organization a little easier to follow. I think you did a great job of putting neutral content into the draft. When I was back tracking you in-text citations you did a great job on including all peer-reviewed sources. As well as the links easily brought you to the correct source. From looking at your draft it is unclear to me what article you are drafting this edit for. Another, thing you could do is add the links to Wikipedia articles such as, vertebrates and flying squirrels. This would make it easy for the reader to jump to these Wikipedia pages. Below I left a copy edit of your draft with some grammatical suggestions!

Copy edit: Bats are the only mammals specialized for flight for a few reasons, they have specialized forelimbs, membranes, and impressive pectoral and back muscles used for powering their wingbeats in flight. Both of these muscle groups are similar in appearance among vertebrates. However bats have a unique muscle group known as the occipito-pollicalis, a necessary muscle group for mammalian flight. These muscle groups act to power flight and utilize the plagiopatagium which is the skin overlapping the forelimb, similar to the skin on species of flying squirrels. Sunsetblvd13 (talk) 17:08, 25 March 2022 (UTC)

Peer reviewer: Jasmine Kunda Neutral content: I feel like the section your editing could be rewritten in a more neutral way. I don't think you need to add the phrase "for a few reasons", and change the word impressive. Reliable sources: Your sources seem great! Clear structure: I think the draft is well organized. I think a bit of rewording could be helpful. But overall it is very clear what you want to do and talk about. What pages will be edited? I think adding an embedded link to the article you will be editing could be helpful. Who will do the editing/adding of what topics/ pages?: It is not clear. It may be in the team sandbox. What sorts of contributions with regard to images are planned?: I think adding a photo of the muscles could be really beneficial to the article. Integration: '''Does anything link up with something you or your team is working on? How can you help each other?:''' Unfortunately not, I am dealing with claws and the tail on my articles. I don't think we could help each other. Copy Edit: Bats are the only mammals specialized for flight. They have specialized forelimbs and membranes, as well as, pectoral and back muscles used for powering their wingbeats in flight.[1] Both of these muscle groups are similar in appearance among vertebrates. However bats have a unique muscle group known as the occipito-pollicalis. A necessary muscle group for mammalian flight.[2] These muscle groups act to power flight and utilize the plagiopatagium which is the skin overlapping the forelimb, similar to the skin on species of flying squirrels. [3] Jazzmk2000 (talk) 23:55, 3 April 2022 (UTC)