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1. "member of a group of the educated Criollos - Clarify. sounds like the name of a learned society

2. misleading - "better to obey or to revolt" - insurgents fought over when to launch the fight for independence, and Hidalgo certainly wasn't an advocate for "obeying" colonial gov't

3. attendees of what? clarify

4. first paragraph needs citations

5. explain circumstances of discovery at (paragraph 2)

6. grito definition is misleading - not the mob, it's the speech

7. needs link to Alhóndiga de Granaditas

8. almost no changes made to first section; no changes at all to second section

9. Create link to "the Angel of Independence"

10. citations 16-19 not academic sources - still shortage of citations

Melaniehuska (talk) 23:18, 16 April 2017 (UTC)