User talk:EFohsta-Lynch/sandbox

Wikipedia Test Run:

I do not think this article is neutral. The beginning senteces seem more like opinions rather than facts. “The history of computing is longer than the History of hardware and modern computing technology,” this statement seems rather opinionated because history of hardware and modern computing technology would all technically fall under the history of computing. So to use similar things as comparisons is confusing and you can tell that it is not a factual based statement.

The article could be updated because there have been many forms of new computing technology that have come around since this article was edited, i.e. tablets and wearable tech. The references used in the article are appropriate, however in terms of the external links provided at the bottom of the page I think that some of those articles could be condensed and added to this article to make one clear concise article about the history of computing.

Link to article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/History_of_computing

I will be making edits to the “Digital Electronic Computers” portion because after doing my own research I feel like there is a lot of important historical dates and playmakers that were left out of this section. I will also work on adding sources to the “Concrete Devices” section of this article because there are n sources in that part of the article, so there is no way to know if those facts are accurate and even if that part was plagiarized from somewhere and not given the proper credit. I would also like to work on the “See Also” section because there are other articles on Wikipedia that I think would help with the understanding of some of the topics discussed in this article.

New sources to be used: https://plato.stanford.edu/entries/computing-history/ http://mason.gmu.edu/~montecin/computer-hist-web.htm http://www.computerhistory.org/timeline/computers/#169ebbe2ad45559efbc6eb3572083fb7

EFohsta-Lynch (talk) 18:15, 5 September 2017 (UTC)