User talk:EGOeditor/MyCeliacID

Helpme
I've cancelled out that "helpme" - it looks from the below that this is being dealt with? If you do need to use a helpme, please place it on your own user talk page, User talk:EGOeditor, in a new section at the end, and put your question after it. Cheers,  Chzz  ►  19:35, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments
Okay, I've had a preliminary look at it and made some simple changes based on the Manual of Style. To be honest, it reads very much like advertising masquerading as an article, but I'm not experienced enough at Wiki-editing to know what to take out, edit, or leave untouched (other than the price and ™). That said, I think this article is probably rescuable if you can find someone with more experience who's willing to go over it from a more neutral point-of-view. I would suggest that you ask for further assistance somewhere like WikiProject Medicine, maybe even specifically at the gastroenterology page. Even the village pump might work.

If you do solicit outside opinions on the article anywhere, I'd suggest being very up-front about it. Tell people that the article has previously been deleted and that you're trying to rework it into a proper article. If you have any association with the company, mention that as well...it'll tell people that you're too close to the subject to be objective, but that you're genuinely interested in getting this to article quality. Maybe even consider tagging the article with advert, which, if you're lucky, may draw attention to it by people who might be interested in helping to re-write it.

Be prepared to accept the fact that people may take a lot of the article out and, as I did, suggest that it be listed in Coeliac disease, rather than as an article of its own. If you can find something, it would probably also benefit from statistics in a reliable source indicating how widely-used the test is, as well as the sensitivity and specificity of the test or other similar indicators of accuracy.

I don't think I have anything more "of substance" to edit in this article, but I'll re-read it tomorrow and see if anything else jumps out at me. I'll also keep an eye on it and do any further copyediting that may be needed if anybody else contributes to it. --RobinHood70 (talk) 23:04, 6 August 2009 (UTC)

(EGOeditor (talk) 17:22, 7 August 2009 (UTC))