User talk:ESenvironment/Impacts of tourism in Kodagu district/Jaimee.Pal Peer Review

Thank you for the peer review Jaimee!

Here are the improvements I made to the "Impacts of tourism in Kodagu district":

Lead:

◇ Maybe reduce the number of references in this section? Wiki says Leads should not contain too many, so if the references will be referred to again in the body you might be able to cut them out of the intro

Response: I reduced the number of citations in my lead that were repeated in the rest of my article's body.

Content:

◇ In the 'Environmental Impacts' section, maybe consider making two separate paragraphs for positive and negative impacts as the current layout is confusing - it goes from 'tourism brings financial support' to 'tourism is bad'.

Response: I made sub-headings in the 'environmental impacts' section which separates the positive and negative impacts. I am thinking of doing the positive and negative sub-headings for all sections ie cultural, economic.

Organization:

◇ Some transitions between sentences could use another look-over (eg. in the Lead, second paragraph, it doesn't quite flow).

Response: I am changing my sections organization style. I separated the negative and positive to allow for better transitions, also I will add transition sentences between sections/sub-headings to make it flow better.

Overall, I am looking to complete my article today. (nov. 20). Hopefully you are able to look it over one last time! Thanks again Jaimee!

EHS (talk) 16:55, 20 November 2021 (UTC) ESenvironment